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There he stood, black hair falling down, cloak tied around his shoulders, and those eyes watching me like full-moons. He smiled at my expression and tightened his grip on my ankle.
“What the hell? Are you stalking me now?”
Another smile. “No.”
“Then what do you want?”
“I’m not leaving without my kiss.” He was dead serious.
Despite how suddenly freaked out I was, my heart fluttered in my chest. “I never said I’d give you a kiss. Get out!”
“No, you never did say that, but I don’t care. If I have to take one, I will, but I’m not leaving until I get one.”
I kicked at him, trying to make him let go of my ankle. If I didn’t get away this guy was going to rape me or something, no matter how hot he was. “Get off! Let go!”
He swooped down and put an arm around my waist. Still with one arm, he lifted me off the bed and crushed me into his body. Before I could say anything his lips were on mine. I struggled against him but it didn’t make any difference. And then I relaxed and kissed him back. I can’t say what made me do it.
His lips were so soft and there was something seductively sweet about the way he gently kissed me, no pressure or anything. That was until he pushed his tongue into my mouth. I knew I should have pushed him away and yelled at him because that was a lot more than just a kiss, but his taste had already hit me. I grabbed his neck and pulled him closer, wanting more.
That’s when he pulled away, snickering. “Well, Valerie,” he released me and started fumbling with the strings to his cloak. My heart sped up. He was taking it off!  But instead of dropping it onto the floor he whirled it up in the air. It went over my head and he brought it around my shoulders. His nimble fingers quickly tied a knot below my chin. “That was fun, but I do have to go. I’ll be back for this, by the way.” Then he pecked my lips and was out the door before I had even caught my breath.
I stood there caught between oh wow and he better not come back. He’d left me breathless, but I was still pissed at him. Just because he could manhandle me doesn’t mean he should. Yet, part of me liked it.
I looked down at the cloak. It was a lot nicer up close. I thought it was just a thin flimsy little thing, but it must have been designer or something. It was heavy and deep black velvet that could probably keep you warm in any weather. The inside was lined with midnight blue satin.
I really hoped he didn’t plan on getting this back. I wasn’t sure if I would be able to give it back now that I knew how nice it was.
But why did he have such an expensive cape for a costume? I’m pretty sure he was trying to be Count Dracula, but most people just bought those little plastic capes. This thing was beautiful. I sat on the edge of the bed and started playing with the corner of it. It was so soft.

After about twenty minutes of day dreaming, I decided I ought to go down and enjoy my birthday party. Although, I was pretty sure the most exciting part of the night was over.
I trudged down the stairs and through the house. I couldn’t help but notice how empty the place seemed without him now. Him because I still didn’t know his freaking name! How could I not know his name? I had just practically made-out with the guy and I didn’t even know his name. Did that make me a slut? No! It most certainly did not!
“So, how’d it go?” Sarah said as I came down the porch steps. She had a smile plastered on her face. “Did he find you?”
I stared at her. “You. Are in trouble. What the heck did you say to him?”
She looked away guiltily, but she was still smiling. “I didn’t say anything,” she said innocently. Only Sarah could look guilty, act innocently and get away with it the way she did. “He came inside and did whatever he did all on his own. I just gave him permission to go in the house.”
She pouted when I didn’t say anything else. Then she smiled and tugged on the cloak. “It had to have gone good. I mean, he let you keep this. Wow, this thing is nice!”
I was bursting to tell her. A girl can only stay mad for so long when she’s dying to tell her girlfriend all about some guy…it’s just the way things are. “Yeah, and he said he’s going to come back to get it!”
Sarah bobbed up and down. “That’s definitely a good thing.”
Okay, I know it could be longer, because lord knows that i have at LEAST twenty more pages than this done, but I feel like no one is reading. If you're reading and you like it TELL ME or I'm probably going to delete it off DevArt.

Anybody want to crack at his name yet? Becasuse it'll be two or three more posts before you get to his name soo....
Guesses please??
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DGalavez Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I thinks its an awesome story, I was searching and yours popped up, i need some inspiration and i havent stopped reading it.
ezmurelda Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2009
prob to late but ill thro names:

Mark, Vincent, Victor, Hunter, Jagger, Coal, Jerome

just names. love the story
alexacl Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2009
this story is sooo good so far!!
im guessing jacob?? but thats because twilight is influencing me hahah even though jacob isnt a vampire he has the long hair & forcefully kissed bella
then again the seductive playfulness could be emmett so ill have to wait and see :)
Kakurosu Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2009
well, james, romeo and Damien is good names, but theyr all so used... jack too... Darren maybe...
Aby-4 Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2008
It's an awesome story, don't delete it.
KanDance824 Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! I actually had to take a break from this one! If you get bored while waiting for more you could totally read my Brooke story *wink wink*. JK you don't have to!

I'm so glad you like it!
Aby-4 Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2008
ha ha ha okay.
evil-snow Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2008  Student General Artist
I think it's ausome!!!!
=) :dance:
KanDance824 Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Oh yay, thanks!! It's freaking amazing to have another reader!!

And no his name isn't was kind of, my boy is French (Old time french)
evil-snow Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2008  Student General Artist
oh, then is it Pear?
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